Andrew Dlugan - Face the Wind - Toastmasters Speech Contest

[TheMobileMotivator]

the speech seemed very rehearsed but that is what you must do as a speaker. Andrew wrote a great speech and has potential to be a great speaker! Keep up the great work!

[susandevy]

he had everything for a good speech, but if only he put enough passion during delivering his speech.........

[stickybelvedere]

sounds very rehearsed....

doesnt sound natural

[legggggggggy]

He has an annoying high pitch voice. Where is his manhood?

He is over acting which is pretty annoying to watch unless you like acting.

He adds too many emotions to everything he talks about that kills the purpose because I lose the big picture of everything and cant imagine so much stuff at once.

I didn't get the point of the story. His story wasn't relating to me. Too much poem stuff talk... cant handle it.

[phoenixflares]

I don't know what is the limit of acting to not become over-acting?

[noshyfication]

i love giving speeches and for my speech class i had to watch this video ... i must say it was very very nicely done. i loved how the story just came together. At the beginning i thought "O great it is going to be about house mortgage....buying a house" etc something i am not interested it now...but as i listened i got more into it. and love it!

[UhMark]

tough crowd here. I am reading them and trying to see how they could find the whole thing lacking in authenticity. You would have to probably be in the audience for that. I think that when you said sometimes strong roots are not enough you broke your metaphor.

Could a person's roots be his or her values? I thought that is what you were going to say? If not, then what are a person's roots?

[tinkamyra]

I am joining my local Toast masters, i am NOT a shy person but seem to go very quiet when i have to stand up in front of an audience, I would love to be able to stand and talk infront of people. They tell me one day i will.

[nvedia]

Where is the script?

[troutopera]

You seem to follow the techniques you were told but your delivery looked like you were going through a checklist humour here, gestures here, Change tone and volume of voice here. But mostly you had the same tempo. Also don't act as another character if you can't act. showed no enthusiasm in talking to the audience. You moved but it mostly aimlessly from point to point. Standing Still is stronger.Found your website and am amazed if you vague bio is true. You should no be coaching anyone. Stop

[SellingGenius]

Andrew,

On positive, great clear positive diction. I understood everything!

I can see this well-rehearsed, but somewhere along the way, your authenticity got diluted. I wasn't wowed, drawn it.. A little too deliberate and little spontaneity. Felt you were acting and rather than speaking.

Still great promise as a speaker. Let go a little more and enjoy it and audience will engage.

[kay35]

I thought the speaker was power and vivid. The speech was interesting, I like the way he uses his body language to convey the story.

The delivery was engaging at first however the speech was getting too long it needed a few more punch lines to make explosive like a bomb.

The speaker showed confidence and collected. I would suggest to relax a bit more in his next speech.

The speaker is talented and like the Maple Japanese tree it only needs to face more the wind. congrats!

[bmmanjesh]

Mr. Dlugan, you definitely haven't won this contest. If you'd won I am really suprised. Similies were awful. Delivery is like over-acting. No logic. Pathetic body language. Most of all, you didn't sound like a guy who was giving genuine message. Whole speech including delivery looked fake to me. I was laughing at the people who were laughing. Only good thing was language and no fillers... I am sorry it's not the toastmasters kinda' feedback. But, that's what I felt.

[goldenwellness]

Dear Andrew, listening to your speech I was almost blown away! I especially appreciated the example of miscarriages, and Maximus. I thought that your use of words was exquisite--comparing yardwork to toastmastes, and maple tree to a wrestler.

Some way I think you might improve would be to "prune" your examples--open with the wresting of the tree, then open up to audience through personal experience, and USE your voice as if it was the wind! Lastly give us key ways to face the wind.

Well done!