his thoughts and feelings, not just through movement? We want to know and feel how he thinks. However, I can understand if you don't want to project your character's full perspective on the audience. Just a suggestion.
Anyway, sorry if I stated the same things again. I'm kind of multi-tasking and quite off track here. xD
I understand that you wanted to create a sort of tension between the two characters before they interact with each other, but there should be a limit before the audience loses interest. One of a movie director's priorities is to keep his audience interested. Just giving you my opinion, of course, I'm not saying you should change it.
Well, if you cannot put background music in the movie, how about natural background? Show vestiges of the character's anxiety, not only through movement, but +
they sound like their breathing or how they walk through the scene, do they saunter or stomp? It gives the characters, well, more character.
I also understand you want a diversity in how you film your movie. However, I still feel like things rushed too much. You should have had the two characters speak to each other, instead of having one recklessly assault the other. It'll give us more things to think about and wonder about the outcomes and reasoning with a few more facts. After all, it's +
more fun for the audience to think the other possbilities that are extended from that one scene. Even though the broad generalization is narrow, we understand more so some of the viewers may not just get lost on the way. You want to keep it on a ground level of curiousity and predicitability.
Anyways, I find you idea of creating this film to be quite interesting. Though can I still say that the character should also interact with the audience more, by letting the audience know more about +
Anyway, the movie was overall good. I do agree with the previous comment to speed up the interaction between the two main characters, add more character when acting, and try to fill those awkward spaces with music.
Though, I also feel you just jumped into the plot. You should show how it all started, so the viewers can watch the plot develop. It'll get the audience more interested and we'll be more familiar with the characters themselves. +
We'll learn the reasoning of the characters. Making movies are just like writing books, inform the audience first to avoid confusion and develop everything from there.
I also feel that you could have made some better shots. For example, at the end when Oliver is frantically trying to call for help; show his actions regarding about the phone and then show his face when he becomes anxious before ascending the stairs.
Thank you for your review. ^^ And I will take those suggestions and use them in the best way I can...but, of course, I am going to explain why I had certain things certain ways. =)
For one, I want to thank you for saying my movie is overall good so far, for it is my first try. =)
Second, the reason I didn't speed up the interaction between the two characters is because if I had it were Rakin found Oliver like right away...then that would of been very predictable. It would of also of been -c-
-c- very predictable if I had Oliver find Rakin in the room. By doing what I did, I was trying to make it as if Rakin was never going find Oliver.
Third, I agree on the acting part, and I admit it wasn't on my mind at the time. xD
Forth, those "awkward" spaces have no room for music. =) Not even background music. I didn't want music in those places because I wanted to help make the viewers believe they were there...in a way. But I understand what you mean.
Fifth, I understand what you mean about the plot thing.
But the "point of view" of this movie is just that. It is trying to make you feel like you just "walked in" on a story. Besides that, not all books or movies tell you everything from the beginning, and this is only the first part of the full movie. xD
And I never said I wanted to avoid confusion. ^^ I want to cause worth-while confusion...like, the kind that makes you think "What could this mean?", and not the kind where a banana-c
-c- jumps in and starts to sing in front of Oliver and Rakin...that would be pointless confusion, if you understand what I mean.
And I agree with the camera angle suggestion for the end.
Anyways, to wrap my explanation up, this movie was meant to be the way it was. Odd, not clear, and different. It is true I shouldn't have to explain it in order for people to understand, but that is the nature of the film. Hopefully, people will understand that not all stories tell all. =)
Hmm, okay here begins my critique after watching the full video. First of all, this was very entertaining and allmost breath takeing. BUT, there are always things to improve on.
1)Try and fill those really awkward empty spaces with a bit more music otehr then the scary music. It'll add a lot more dynamic to the video and such.
2)Try and add more passion to your characters. Feel as though you feel their pain and confussion, and such.
3)Try to make it a bit shorter because it almost made -c-
me feel as though I was waiting forever for the two of them to finally meet. You know? I think it added and took away from different aspects of the film overall.
Anyways, keep up the amazing work and finish the next part following my tips xD!
Wow, that was pretty well done. It's an interesting concept as well. I am a bit confused as to why your supposed -friend- is hunting you (is he a sociopath?), but the concept is interesting.
I am the one hunting. xD (I am Rakin, Oliver was the one already home)...and like the description says, something made Rakin HATE Oliver in the past. =) lol.
But thank you very much, I am happy you enjoyed it! =D
Idk if you know me, but I'm from your LAC 2 class :)
CR_M_Pronda :)
BTW, nice video :)
shmikee11996 2 years ago
You seem familiar, and thank you. :)
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
great one!
lusasmproductions 2 years ago 2
boring boring nice keyboard only
moo04240 2 years ago
wicked awesome bro
poggyproductions 2 years ago
wow this is pretty good
you should so take this up at college dude
SophieSeduction 2 years ago
Aw, thanks. ^^
Happy you enjoyed it! =)
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
his thoughts and feelings, not just through movement? We want to know and feel how he thinks. However, I can understand if you don't want to project your character's full perspective on the audience. Just a suggestion.
Anyway, sorry if I stated the same things again. I'm kind of multi-tasking and quite off track here. xD
maliciousxpropaganda 2 years ago
I understand that you wanted to create a sort of tension between the two characters before they interact with each other, but there should be a limit before the audience loses interest. One of a movie director's priorities is to keep his audience interested. Just giving you my opinion, of course, I'm not saying you should change it.
Well, if you cannot put background music in the movie, how about natural background? Show vestiges of the character's anxiety, not only through movement, but +
maliciousxpropaganda 2 years ago
they sound like their breathing or how they walk through the scene, do they saunter or stomp? It gives the characters, well, more character.
I also understand you want a diversity in how you film your movie. However, I still feel like things rushed too much. You should have had the two characters speak to each other, instead of having one recklessly assault the other. It'll give us more things to think about and wonder about the outcomes and reasoning with a few more facts. After all, it's +
maliciousxpropaganda 2 years ago
more fun for the audience to think the other possbilities that are extended from that one scene. Even though the broad generalization is narrow, we understand more so some of the viewers may not just get lost on the way. You want to keep it on a ground level of curiousity and predicitability.
Anyways, I find you idea of creating this film to be quite interesting. Though can I still say that the character should also interact with the audience more, by letting the audience know more about +
maliciousxpropaganda 2 years ago
Hey. This is Malicious_Propaganda from Neo!
Anyway, the movie was overall good. I do agree with the previous comment to speed up the interaction between the two main characters, add more character when acting, and try to fill those awkward spaces with music.
Though, I also feel you just jumped into the plot. You should show how it all started, so the viewers can watch the plot develop. It'll get the audience more interested and we'll be more familiar with the characters themselves. +
maliciousxpropaganda 2 years ago
We'll learn the reasoning of the characters. Making movies are just like writing books, inform the audience first to avoid confusion and develop everything from there.
I also feel that you could have made some better shots. For example, at the end when Oliver is frantically trying to call for help; show his actions regarding about the phone and then show his face when he becomes anxious before ascending the stairs.
Anyway, I'll watch part 2 later.
Got loads of homework because of CSTS. :|
maliciousxpropaganda 2 years ago
Thank you for your review. ^^ And I will take those suggestions and use them in the best way I can...but, of course, I am going to explain why I had certain things certain ways. =)
For one, I want to thank you for saying my movie is overall good so far, for it is my first try. =)
Second, the reason I didn't speed up the interaction between the two characters is because if I had it were Rakin found Oliver like right away...then that would of been very predictable. It would of also of been -c-
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
-c- very predictable if I had Oliver find Rakin in the room. By doing what I did, I was trying to make it as if Rakin was never going find Oliver.
Third, I agree on the acting part, and I admit it wasn't on my mind at the time. xD
Forth, those "awkward" spaces have no room for music. =) Not even background music. I didn't want music in those places because I wanted to help make the viewers believe they were there...in a way. But I understand what you mean.
-c-
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
-c-
Fifth, I understand what you mean about the plot thing.
But the "point of view" of this movie is just that. It is trying to make you feel like you just "walked in" on a story. Besides that, not all books or movies tell you everything from the beginning, and this is only the first part of the full movie. xD
And I never said I wanted to avoid confusion. ^^ I want to cause worth-while confusion...like, the kind that makes you think "What could this mean?", and not the kind where a banana-c
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
-c- jumps in and starts to sing in front of Oliver and Rakin...that would be pointless confusion, if you understand what I mean.
And I agree with the camera angle suggestion for the end.
Anyways, to wrap my explanation up, this movie was meant to be the way it was. Odd, not clear, and different. It is true I shouldn't have to explain it in order for people to understand, but that is the nature of the film. Hopefully, people will understand that not all stories tell all. =)
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
lol dood ur house was pefect for a "man-hunt!"! lol wat kinda guns are u using? lol i hope airsoft or bb...lol great job
JakeTehCraka14 2 years ago
Hmm, okay here begins my critique after watching the full video. First of all, this was very entertaining and allmost breath takeing. BUT, there are always things to improve on.
1)Try and fill those really awkward empty spaces with a bit more music otehr then the scary music. It'll add a lot more dynamic to the video and such.
2)Try and add more passion to your characters. Feel as though you feel their pain and confussion, and such.
3)Try to make it a bit shorter because it almost made -c-
qtpiecybunni 2 years ago
me feel as though I was waiting forever for the two of them to finally meet. You know? I think it added and took away from different aspects of the film overall.
Anyways, keep up the amazing work and finish the next part following my tips xD!
qtpiecybunni 2 years ago
Alright, thank you for your tips. ^^
But Part 2 and Part 3 is already done. =)
And I am very happy you enjoyed!
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
awesome man..i wanna see part 2!!!!!!!!!!
JakeTehCraka14 2 years ago
I still love this. The idea of it is so new and different from other media clips out. Originality gets a ten from me. (:
Keep it up. I want to see moreeeee
whoacrayons 2 years ago
awsome dude
jared7645 2 years ago
Cool, so it's like a time travel thing?
AntaurisProtector 2 years ago
Wow, that was pretty well done. It's an interesting concept as well. I am a bit confused as to why your supposed -friend- is hunting you (is he a sociopath?), but the concept is interesting.
Wizpigg 2 years ago
I am the one hunting. xD (I am Rakin, Oliver was the one already home)...and like the description says, something made Rakin HATE Oliver in the past. =) lol.
But thank you very much, I am happy you enjoyed it! =D
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
cool i love this
bobg98TV 2 years ago
5 STARS!
kodster991 2 years ago
i love how u gave it a rating and stuufff XD
babs2luv31 2 years ago
yayyyyyyyyyy my favoritttttee!
babs2luv31 2 years ago
awesome movie 10/5!!! great job i cant wait for part 2
Checkz3 2 years ago
OMGOSH! THIS IS SO AWESOME!
21stCenturyLego 2 years ago
Hey that was great
Simbawolf155 2 years ago
Genius.
Starryish 2 years ago 2
Wow, thank you. =)
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
Your hard work paid off, great job!!
Can't wait to see the rest.
(oh, and punch bug!!) : )
thefourmonkeys 2 years ago
Thank you very much. :)
And happy to hear. ^^
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
COOL! You must of spent a lot of time on that! It's so AWESOME! I can't wait for the next two parts!
stonesaur40 2 years ago
Thank you. =) And we did! Happy to hear. =)
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago
When's the second part going to be out? By the way, I LOVED the ending!
stonesaur40 2 years ago
Sometime next month. =) And happy you did! x) lol.
ScypaxPictures 2 years ago