'Poison Ivy' - Original song by ZakandJen

[smokyfairy]

too bad you cant take a bit of criticism......AND i was nice and joky like, but you deleted my comment. Sad children lol. Get a good singer and record it when you have someone who can sing if its that bad.. which, it is. Especially your lyrics, sounds like christmas then chats breeze about leafs, lol psh

[Cosmicevergreen]

@smokyfairy what is childish is your comment, it was only a laugh you ethier like it or just move on I am sure their are plenty of other videos haters like you can comment on, go on shooo go on now. Plus you should keep in mind "If you can't say something nice don't say anything at all" :)

[xCRYSTALMOONBEAMx]

pfff, this is the NME 'JellyGulper'... no need for a full scale review, that quite frankly makes you sound like a bit of a wally!

for a first song it was great, well done both of you! :) xxx

[ZakandJen]

@xCRYSTALMOONBEAMx Haha don't worry 'JellyGulper' is my brother :L

[Cosmicevergreen]

well i never said i could sing well the song sounds strange with jen all by herself and well our camera girl wasn't any better so.

[JellyGulper]

...however,one line.grabbed my attention,as in the way you sang it.

"You stand so strong, pride in your eyes"

you put so much emotion into that line,if you put that much into the rest it would be brilliant. too bad you didn't.

OVERALL SCORES

JEN SINGING 8/10

ZAK SINGING 5/10

SONGWRITING 7/10

GUITAR 7/10

That concludes my review.yay!

[JellyGulper]

and boring,and sounds like no effort went into it.

Even though it's just in the chorus,the words "poison ivy",are overused.

on to the positive, the rest sounded like it had some meaning,and gives the effect you probably meant it to have. some of the lines were brilliant,but overshadowed.

when i listened to the first line,it kind of put me off but i persevered and this song has potential. Voice: Zak Your voice is ok,but it is too strong for these lyrics,and out of tune sometimes,(continued)

[JellyGulper]

Continued...the lyrics and amplifies the emotion in the song.

all in all good skills,but will definetly improve,in future songs and in reattempting this song. all in all,you're kind of well,much better than zak,so 7/10 for her.

Now on to zak: Songwriting:Could be improved ,definitely ESPECIALLY the first line,those lyrics,don't really,go with the rest of the song,as the rest of the song sounds like it COULD have some form of meaning,but this bit,well...it's generic,to be continued)

[JellyGulper]

Ok,i put a stupid comment,Now to get SERIOUS.

The irst line was,um..not very good,.

But the rest was great. let me begin the review.

Jen: Good singing, nice sounding soft voice,in very good time with the song,well,until the end...it just sounded too dragged out,a bit like moaning.but i guess that was both of you,so yeah.

guitar:. fits with the Lyrics and melody,you don't notice the strumming at first,but watching it again it sounds much better,and unifies with (to be continued)

[Banoffeepie16]

I don't personally think the guy on the left is that bad a singer and maybe he is a little bit too hard on himself :)

[Cosmicevergreen]

great female singer and the best lyrics i have heard in ages. To bad for the guy on the left can't sing. Ow well i guess i will just have to stick to writing lyrics =P

[JellyGulper]

Yum, posion ivy sandwich for breakfast,om nom nom nom,tasty.

[BeautifulGirlByDana]

Poison Ivy' - by ZakandJen  5/5 ★s

[chezandgeorge]

aww i love it!!!!!!! u two go really well your voices go well together x

[MissBanoffee]

Verry nicee! alothough I do love the ending - "Press the button!" :L

I mean Jenny, I'm not quite sure what film you like... ;) (even though one of mine does feature :) )

Waiting for the next so no pressure!

Love you guys (= xx

[17clairey]

Actually LOVe this!!! :D its soo awesome :D and clever.... and some parts stolen from poems ;) haha XD you're awesome :D suits you guys' voices too :D Love!!! xxxxxx