Spyke's Poetry corner

[beautifuloldwoman]

Benny2Rats is very good too.!

[beautifuloldwoman]

Personally, I think you have great potential to become a very good poet. Your pen is laced with someone who seems older than your few years. This is the 1st. time I ever read anything by you, but it connected with a seasoned writer. Keep up the good work!

[dukespal]

That was sooooo good! good job! =)

[lilboyracer21]

thats good its clever too

[saffronix]

Thou art a poet I've seen thee show it You have the looks For high sales of books Here's my point: You need a venture joint For a successful adventure I propose a joint venture We write in in partnership (Now don't give me lip!) Your youthful energy and face And old me will put us ahead in the race

[saffronix]

Draft#2 (spot the improvements & corrections) .. Thou art a poet I've seen thee show it You have the looks To sell many books And here's my point: You need a venture joint For a successful adventure I propose a joint venture We write in partnership (Now don't give me lip!) Your youthful energy and face And old me will put us ahead in the race

[glassfone]

Haha you've got the poets out in everyone. Shame I like to rhyme cunt with blunt and shit with fit otherwise I'd have a go

[lolitakairi]

=] It's nice...

[benny2rats]

I have felt the evil that I dare not mention far beyond our comprehension The darkest night devoid of any golden light Where demons call and through there clouds beauty will fall I always close my eyes and hope that paradise my rise and that my dreams will close the demons eyes

[benny2rats]

So much deep emotion

feels like love swimming through our rivers and oceans

I feel i must learn to care, leave my soul bare

Search deep down

lift the hate from my frown

learn that good, is Gods beauty understood

my drams of that wishing well, as i fight the demons that drag me towards there hell

Its means so much, my soul, my love beneath to touch

[benny2rats]

They say that love is blind

and that oneday we will learn to love our humankind

Open our eyes and see

the earth form through the tree

in somekind of love trance

see the angels dance

deep substance

And through eachday, we will learn to pray

and say

that its about time we took our hate away

[ArtisticBlue1]

that....touched me. very deep dude!!!! NICE

[benny2rats]

time is always a reminder it reminds us, of where we stand of when the dust falls within the land time will always be in control it will be with us through young and old through death and whatever may start as we become weak of hearth Time will always be all we have is dreams to hope and see time has a place we can only hope that there is someone in outerspace

[benny2rats]

i walked through the wilderness and found a flower it was a beauty amongst the mess I felt that my world was torn apart so much stress This flower and its beauty i embraced I smelt its scent my mind raced I thought about my time which i had spent about my rage, as i felt trapped within this cage How can such beauty lay so still, as it captures my eyes, i looked to the blue in the skies, now i understand, we live in a wonderland

[deidarasfangirl223]

thats a relly good poem keep it up ^-^

[brkhunter]

Great poem, which path should a person choose? I also to like write but sometimes ended up with a writer's block. Please share more of your works. ^_^

[AbSoluTc]

Really cool dude. I found your videos when I was watching some others. You seem like a really cool and intelligent guy.

Poem was really nice. Dark and deep. Look forward to more vids. :D

[sepie]

yea.. it sounds pretty cool. didn't quite hear the first part :)

[ClaireL1989]

Thought it was cool, your a real sensitive guy its nice to see :)

[ScrewAttackChina]

deep. A+

[LWagner4]

I can tell you're tough and at the same time have intelligence and a real heart.

You stand up and use violent words against haters, and rightly so, but you're also a real gentleman.

Great poem!

[Goobian]

Good stuff dude. Girls love that stuff :)

[1357skater]

wow....deep.! great poem!

[118157]

sweet

[theoreo88]

Great poem! I like the atmosphere that u brought in your voice!

[justjuggalo]

nice .....it speaks to me!

[stfuuuuuuuuu]

really like ur poem man, really deep

[stfuuuuuuuuu]

fuck this jungle, this footpath sucks, phychopath path. i rather take my daily bath, before i turn this shit into a fucking blood----baaaaaaaaaattthh !!!

spend some time on it, consider i`m latin...hahahahahahahahah

[Prideboi26]

Good job dude, can't wait to hear more :-)

[smack8675309]

well i love the conseped of it but i wish your camaras a bit blery

[NikoClemente]

its awesome.

you have a talent for playing with words.

i like it alot.

5/5

[fullofmetal]

Very Good.

I believe you have a talent for it.

[Trillian2003]

ahh it was very good :). and so true.

[Spykopathic]

im glad you like it hun