And as far as lyrics go it sounded good, but the 'peaceful sky' line didnt really work. I get it. You were looking for a rhyme that would work and at least kinda make sence, trust me I've been there, but my advice is to never compromise. Make sure your lyrics make sense AND flow well together. If the rhyme doesnt work, change up the line.
Anyway I hope all this helped! I look forward to seeing you guys progress :D
This aint bad. But some advise; try to almost shout when you rap, at least in a way that you feel comfortable with. Rap is supposed to be aggresive, so NEVER hold back. Even if you think it will sound dumb, getting loud and almost angry will help your voice develop. The basic idea is to go past 'the line', make sure you never hide behind it.
amazing
joezphab 4 months ago
Ew I remember this XD;;; I didn't do that well haha
GreivingSoul 1 year ago
@GreivingSoul Do you still do this sort of stuff? I would love to work with you.
DJMaggotTheory 1 year ago
@DJMaggotTheory Yeah sort of lol I'm not as famous as JNL though. He does live shows.
GreivingSoul 1 year ago
@GreivingSoul I dont care about fame. :p I just finished my second song and it'll be up pretty soon. Let me know if you ever wanna collab.
DJMaggotTheory 1 year ago
@DJMaggotTheory Haha iight don't be afraid to ask me either lol
GreivingSoul 1 year ago
And as far as lyrics go it sounded good, but the 'peaceful sky' line didnt really work. I get it. You were looking for a rhyme that would work and at least kinda make sence, trust me I've been there, but my advice is to never compromise. Make sure your lyrics make sense AND flow well together. If the rhyme doesnt work, change up the line.
Anyway I hope all this helped! I look forward to seeing you guys progress :D
LuquilloDC 1 year ago
@LuquilloDC Thanks for the critics man! Will think about it to Next time i make a song!
Sorry for late awnser btw.
JNLrapper 1 year ago
This aint bad. But some advise; try to almost shout when you rap, at least in a way that you feel comfortable with. Rap is supposed to be aggresive, so NEVER hold back. Even if you think it will sound dumb, getting loud and almost angry will help your voice develop. The basic idea is to go past 'the line', make sure you never hide behind it.
LuquilloDC 1 year ago
LIKE IT !
H3LLTeRRoRdaR 1 year ago
too much rap
ThePumpkinAppa 1 year ago
:O This was realy good!
Great job mate.
Sjaantje92 1 year ago 2
dude you aint no chester bennington but you are close to what rocked about him back in the day before they sold out
RIKILEESUGIMOTO 2 years ago
nice nice :D... love all of ur song and covers man :D
rushourz 2 years ago
@rushourz Thanks man!
JNLrapper 2 years ago
nice video reminds me of linkin park xx
GalwayChick 2 years ago