I'm Wrong

[Khyrid]

Intellectual honesty is the path to intellectual superiority. It reminds me of a Chinese finger trap, you have to give in to be free.

[67sixtyseven67]

THIS IS SPARTAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!!

[Elaina43]

Yep!  I know that I relate.

[FeroGotBalls]

This is exactly why free speech is so very important, great vid.

//Fero

[SaintCog]

Not sure about the sea/drowning metaphor. It sets up a picture that is not resolved with a boat/ shallow end/ floating . The mouth is the cause of this wrongness sea, but drowning implies loss of speak. "Dark of wrongness" would allow for speak to be confusing like a multiple echos in a cave and a signal listened to and filtered, used to navigate reality like a bat. You also used the word growth which could make wrongness a fertilizing and /or toxic medium. My $0.02. Got me thinking, thx.

[renegade4dio]

@SaintCog Wow. I'm humbled. You managed to think deeper about my choices than I did! I didn't ponder every word. I wrote it in about 1/2 hour with very little revision from the first draft. It just "seemed right". I imagined myself deep underwater, in a still, silent stasis, looking up at the distant surface light. But, now that you point it out, lost in the dark looking out at the entrance of a cave or some such probably is a better metaphor than drowning. 

[ceresWar]

you look like joaquin phoenix

[RowanFortuneWood]

Well put; fallibilism in verse :) I like it.

[renegade4dio]

@RowanFortuneWood Thanks... And about as didactic as one can get in free verse, methinks. Since our exchange on the subject, I've spent a not insignificant amount of time trying to create a work that WASN'T didactic... I now think that such art is not only somehow beyond my ability to appreciate, it's beyond my ability to create. I'm a little saddened by that realization, but I guess that achieving that self understanding is better than deluding myself into believing I can do what I cannot.

[RowanFortuneWood]

@renegade4dio My own perspective has been back and forth a few times since then; however in my view what is most important as an artist is always to be thinking self-critically about what one is trying to create and never be fully satisfied, which touches on the great subject of your poem.

[Maiyanna]

Very nice! Getting it wrong is a good learning tool. ;)

[Vogter2100]

Nice :)

[ExaggeratedElegy]

Absolutely superb :) Permission to feature on channel page, sir?

Regards,

George

[renegade4dio]

@ExaggeratedElegy Wow. Thanks for that possibly excessive compliment. And of course, I'd be honored by even a few minutes on your channel page.

[GodKillerAtheist]

Great video! They won't give you proof but they will give you all the personal insults you want.

[renegade4dio]

@GodKillerAtheist Thanks! I'm actually a little surprised you didn't comment on my last video. It was, in my opinion, quite in line with your style.

[TheAist]

hmmmm...what if youre wrong?

[renegade4dio]

@TheAist Then I hope you'll show me where. If anyone can, I think you could.

[TheAist]

@renegade4dio naw, you were right. im just being silly.