SANDAL

[Talulahhh]

Thanks for your comments, I can't agree more and I hope that next time we'll do something perfect with your help.

[lastdawnferrari]

I didn't want to insult your product. The problems of the "Film" are found mostly in the repetition of certain situations. Meaning that the viewer looses his/her interest very fast.

Example: He meets her on the bench in the middle of "nature" with no shoes. He sets of to pick up the bag and goes by bicycle. The route he chooses is through the fields and a piece of very quiet town. The viewer here looses interest.... There's too much green.

[lastdawnferrari]

If the viewer first sees the lovely naked feet and then the city with the right choice of music (instrumental but not classical) the viewer will start feeling the purity of the young lady and the innocence.

I did not like the scene where he is sitting in the park and smoking. It was very disattached to the rest of the film. That moment he was another person. I could only see him from one angle. If the angel would have changed at least twice the effect would have been different.

[lastdawnferrari]

Example: Showing his point of view. Showing what he sees. That way the viewer feels what he is thinking. When you know what a person prefers looking at the viewer will know what he feels.

The camera that was filming his face on the bike should have had a wider angle. I could only see his face, and I could see into his nose. I need to more expressions of his face in combination to the surrounding (trees, traffic, etc....)

[lastdawnferrari]

Listen, the "short film" was a really good idea. But due to these continuous minor errors the viewer looses interest or simply does not receive any emotions. And Emotions are the key to success. Most film made a breakthrough by simply adding the instrumental versions of pop, rock, rap.... music of the moment.

If you are interested we can still discuss.

[lastdawnferrari]

Hey.

I think you shouldn't have called this "Short Film" SANDAl but SCANDAL.