yo man this is really good, but i have a suggestion for you, sometimes so many multi syllable rymes offers such awkward word choice, like some of this dont make n e senese but it rymes well, if ur trying to get a serious meaning across, choose your words wisely and not just cause they ryme
You're going the right way, it's all about the content quality. And you certainly are good at writing lyrics, the multi sylls are good too, always a bonus.
youre like a tonedeff with a more powerful delivery. i love the meaning of this song, we all have that feeling of being trapped, even the free man. there has to be something to that, right? "dont even try to comprehend the source of aids' existence" so true. WHO gave Africa aids! its not a question its a statement (World Health Organization) -Prince Ea
You definitely have skills. My suggestion would be this: Don't focus so much on making words rhyme, focus on that...and constructing your rhymes in a way that they sound like natural language. It makes it more genuine and ill. You're nice though, no doubt. Peace.
First I tought it was just some stupid spam. But this is actually really good, great flow, you could be a bit more "agressive" and go with a less linear melody, up the beat and the voice sound a bit. Great text too.
Hey man thanks for the add and invite...as for sounding like Wax you are too complete sepparate beings...and emcees...I see no comparison and that's a compliment. Wax has the mainstream essence and you have more of a underground style....nice work, like the fact you actual focus on what you are saying rather than just saying it....check my page out too man I'm trying to update with new ish I'm far from the greatest just doing me!
Another dope, drop bro! This one though has a very powerful message; a line that really stuck out with me;
''This page I've written might seem like my own inflated wisdom
These metaphors are so confusing they debate with millions..''
Brilliant stuff man. Lyrically/content wise this was one of my favourites from you; you had two streched lines in this one though which took away from the flow a bit; but I think that's first. Keep speaking truth, bro. Ears are wide open in these times.
how could it be we've grown adults with the traits of infants/
instead of trying to make a difference we embrace the system
Dope shit man, nice flow and lyrical content.
Some constructive crit... I would work on your drums. I know how it is making beats, but try to find some good drums that really bang, lackluster drums are holding the beat back. And perhaps change up the flow every now and then. But if that's your style then its cool, it works.
fucking love it bra bra whre you from
MrGuzman420 4 months ago
this is fantastic
StacFilmations 10 months ago
yo man this is really good, but i have a suggestion for you, sometimes so many multi syllable rymes offers such awkward word choice, like some of this dont make n e senese but it rymes well, if ur trying to get a serious meaning across, choose your words wisely and not just cause they ryme
etripzsrpuniversal 10 months ago
I like this... nice man very nice Subbed and liked. Good work put out more.
whodoyouthink15 11 months ago
Im downloadin this shit...great work homie
asmaki06 11 months ago
Nice man!
iSekC 11 months ago
Your lyrics are so dope and your voice has a hint of Eminem in there. Nice job
silverskater3125 11 months ago
pretty damn solid man, just noticed your message to me...I can dig this...
humanforpresident 11 months ago
thanks for PMing me this is a great song :]
slipknotbeaver 11 months ago
I like this A LOT! Great job man. I look forward to hearing more...
bronxgirl712 11 months ago
Shit bro! you are a beast, enough said!
Belieftherap 11 months ago
damm the songs great it all flows togethr thanks for sharing ;)
iiEastSyDE 11 months ago
You sent me a friend request bro as soon as I listened to the body beat song, Now this shit is good bro.
ExquiziteXBL 11 months ago
nice flow i digg this
Samster516 11 months ago
God damn. ILL FLOW and LYRICS ! Good shit man i love it
sikz1234567 11 months ago
beasttttttt man subedd!!!!!!!!!!!!
MrYoutoob21 11 months ago
I JUST CAME
NUTUPORSHUTUPINC 11 months ago
You're going the right way, it's all about the content quality. And you certainly are good at writing lyrics, the multi sylls are good too, always a bonus.
bfmv580 11 months ago
the lyrics is sick fam..but the beat is not poppin to me...other then that im diggin it
trakzproductionz 11 months ago
This is some dope work here!!!!! U were right I would like this:) peaze
xxlaceylacexx 11 months ago
hey! good stuff!
KoalaBearStudios 11 months ago
You should put those lyrics on a different beat that beat is garbage sorry man.
SergMgert4285 11 months ago
very nice I like it alot
M.V.B Films
please keep in touch
MEOSHABEAN1 11 months ago
cool thanks for sending it to me i like it
iwaswithyourmum 11 months ago
awesome stuf mate.
tehboxface 11 months ago
lyrics are good beat is too slow though not feeling that beat.
SergMgert4285 11 months ago
So dope.
dashiznit95 11 months ago
holy shit a new non pussyfied eminem u got the rhymes and thatr beat is sick gud job keep it up
31mnm7 11 months ago
nice work , good job
spiker241 11 months ago
youre like a tonedeff with a more powerful delivery. i love the meaning of this song, we all have that feeling of being trapped, even the free man. there has to be something to that, right? "dont even try to comprehend the source of aids' existence" so true. WHO gave Africa aids! its not a question its a statement (World Health Organization) -Prince Ea
spektrumsworld 11 months ago
you are fucking dope when it comes to writing
but you should work on you sound: editing/mixing/
mastering/ into higher quality nahmean? hit me up.
KiddBiz 11 months ago
Yo, Feelin the lyrics Bro, Nice work!
Peace!
MrSkitsophrenik 11 months ago
good shit mang, thanks for the invite and message. keep doin your thing homie!
iNVeSt09 11 months ago
dude good shit, thanks for the message
shmoke123 11 months ago
Awesome, thanks for sending me this video, great music! :)
mayhay4 11 months ago
oh shit!! im glad i clicked on this video. i thought he was some annoying bitch, no offense, but he is good. SUBSCRIBED
jeysterjr2 11 months ago
wow... great rapping!!! you do actually sound like WAX. but a bit better IMO. there's something different... keep it up.
TontonPapaTV 11 months ago
You definitely have skills. My suggestion would be this: Don't focus so much on making words rhyme, focus on that...and constructing your rhymes in a way that they sound like natural language. It makes it more genuine and ill. You're nice though, no doubt. Peace.
KrfNYC2 11 months ago
That was actully pretty good. I thought it was going to be stupid.
iweywrt 11 months ago
First I tought it was just some stupid spam. But this is actually really good, great flow, you could be a bit more "agressive" and go with a less linear melody, up the beat and the voice sound a bit. Great text too.
loferg 11 months ago
really nice , man ! good work.
tranceition 11 months ago
songs good man
keep it up
rep420raleigh 11 months ago
tuff man
jspazds1 11 months ago
dope cover graphics, and nice flow
sope11 11 months ago
Hey man thanks for the add and invite...as for sounding like Wax you are too complete sepparate beings...and emcees...I see no comparison and that's a compliment. Wax has the mainstream essence and you have more of a underground style....nice work, like the fact you actual focus on what you are saying rather than just saying it....check my page out too man I'm trying to update with new ish I'm far from the greatest just doing me!
Respect
Token of Thin Ice
TOKENOFTHINICE 11 months ago
good delivery
awptions 11 months ago
cool song, like it.
HelloMrDanNny 11 months ago
nice, i like how you got variety showing in your beats, lyrics are dope as always
REVAMPtheindustry 11 months ago
Another dope, drop bro! This one though has a very powerful message; a line that really stuck out with me;
''This page I've written might seem like my own inflated wisdom
These metaphors are so confusing they debate with millions..''
Brilliant stuff man. Lyrically/content wise this was one of my favourites from you; you had two streched lines in this one though which took away from the flow a bit; but I think that's first. Keep speaking truth, bro. Ears are wide open in these times.
TwistedImagery 11 months ago
Nice! love the content, love the beat. and good use of multis.
SonicRiderFoLife 11 months ago
dude will your album be up on datpiff . com?
Karlito7teen 11 months ago
man you easily just became one of my favorite rappers right now. this shit is dope and so true. i like your multi syllables. automatic download.
bensononyeugbo 11 months ago 7
Nice track, keep rapping
faustyna555 11 months ago
how could it be we've grown adults with the traits of infants/
instead of trying to make a difference we embrace the system
Dope shit man, nice flow and lyrical content.
Some constructive crit... I would work on your drums. I know how it is making beats, but try to find some good drums that really bang, lackluster drums are holding the beat back. And perhaps change up the flow every now and then. But if that's your style then its cool, it works.
Keep it up brotha
crizpy9119 11 months ago 3