Ashes | An Original

[dashpoet]

beautifully captured; briefly, I was there too

[RadicalComedy]

Wow,,,,could I imagine this....

Bravo!!!!!!!!!!!

I know this wand...I am trying to not know the wand,lol....but I loved how you wrote this. ~Raven

[MsWriteNow]

Thanks, Raven! Stay clear of the wand ;-)

[FromUKtoUSA]

Tina, you are amazing. Your poetry is true art. You have a talent that makes any story or feeling tantalizing and interesting. 5*'s, and I'de give you more if I could. Wonderful!

[MsWriteNow]

Wow, thank you very much!

[DavidRandallCurtis]

five stars

[MsWriteNow]

Thank you, David.

[AliasSpecWriter]

Very very well described! Wonderful poem!

[MsWriteNow]

Thanks, I'm glad you like it.

[tjkoz22]

Superb, Tina. I recalled my early fascination with my father's pipe, only to discover the bitter taste, and disappointment, as well.

Your work is always a treat.

Tom

[MsWriteNow]

Thanks Tom, I thought maybe many people could relate to this one. Thanks for sharing your memory.

[dmio2]

Very cool. Kind of a demented Norman Rockwell moment.

[MsWriteNow]

Hehehe - demented Rockwell...I like that!

[Largo64]

I wish I had put my first taste back in the tray and said, "No, thanks." But I was 17, and trying to impress a girl who smoked. I took it up. And it took me 24 years to quit. I had lost that girl at the end of that summer, but the crap kept filling my lungs for years. Now I've quit. It's 24 years since I've had a cigarette. Quitting the cancer sticks is the best thing I've done for myself. Losing that girl all those years ago . . . who knows?

[MsWriteNow]

Well, you know - if you hadn't lost that girl all those years ago, you most likely wouldn't be the same person you are today. Thanks for sharing.

[nordicsky]

I tried them once and they tasted horrid and made me cough ...so I gave up.

A wonderful piece of narrative painting pictures in my imagination.

Thanks for posting this,

Regards, Peter

[MsWriteNow]

Thanks Peter :)

[janeczka]

What a great depiction of a single moment in life! your magic worked here ;)

[MsWriteNow]

janeczka, thank you :)

[Rocketman16]

I was with you for a brief moment... like a bridge over troubled water...

[MsWriteNow]

Hello lamppost whatcha knowin, I've come to watch your flowers growin...

[Rocketman16]

Wow, its 2am in NY... I'm dappled and drowsy and ready to sleep. Let the morning time drop all its petals on me. :)

[acidityfalls]

I do not smoke.

But listening to this, I saw it...

Poetry playlist. 5+++

Morgan

[MsWriteNow]

Wow thanks Morgan! I love that I was able to capture you even though you couldn't relate.

[acidityfalls]

please check out my alter ego..."insatiableblonde" channel...

you might like this side of me better. hope to see you there.

[xxxSunbeamxxx]

Hi Tina! A wonderful portrait of a moment of curiosity and discovery. Hope you are doing well!! Sunbeam :)

[MsWriteNow]

Thanks Sunbeam. I'll catch up real soon, hope you're doing well :)

[marycigarettes]

i think i'd have taken simon and garfunkel over cigaretes too...takes a child to make the wise choice

[MsWriteNow]

wow, very well said! Isn't it kinda funny how kids can make better choices than grown-ups. It's the intuition. Thanks for listening :)