@xLuciferProductionsx I know I realize that the beginning diary entries were quite cheesy or tacky. I have become a much better writer since then. Thank you for your critisism.
Hey bro. I really like your idea, but I must critique your writing style. It seems you're trying to hard to get your point across. Make your chracter seem more relaxed. Not 'I'm a teenager and we like violence'. Keep working on it though.
nice comic you should check out mine too. I hoped you continued the story lol. I think you should make his dairy seem I don't know less, 'I like guns I don't know why' I'm not trying to be rude I have no intention of being rude but, his dairy entry seems kind of strange in a way. Anyway, subbed I hope you don't take this comment the wrong idea. Nice concept though.
@sianthaibright I agree with what your saying but I stopped making this and drawing period. A long time ago because It got boring. But I draw still only when people ask me to make something for them
@velstor When Did I mention JFK? I might have but sorry this video is old so I don't really remember it. But I definately do not think that. Jfk was an awesome prez
Lol It actually isn't inking. Its just doodles.I never pencil or anything just improvise. I wanted to focus on more of the story. In my school people like to read fun stories as long as the drawings are half decent.
HITMAN REBORN -_- GASP
SHUSHIKID 8 months ago
19 is an adult not boy good job
LOLGIRLZ123451 9 months ago
@LOLGIRLZ123451 Lmao big deal. He's a male right?
JShamw0w 9 months ago
Hey cool comic when u finish it can u put it on YouTube
lilrey1014 11 months ago
WHOA you sound kind of like ash ketchum HA HA HA!!!!
acex320 1 year ago
@xLuciferProductionsx I know I realize that the beginning diary entries were quite cheesy or tacky. I have become a much better writer since then. Thank you for your critisism.
JShamw0w 1 year ago
Hey bro. I really like your idea, but I must critique your writing style. It seems you're trying to hard to get your point across. Make your chracter seem more relaxed. Not 'I'm a teenager and we like violence'. Keep working on it though.
xLuciferProductionsx 1 year ago
whitch pencil do yu use? please answer quik!!!!
thanks
NSZ951LIZS 1 year ago
@NSZ951LIZS Actually this is a pen. I believe I made it with one of those Pilot g pens that you can find anywhere
JShamw0w 1 year ago
dude that's epic! i would actually spend money to buy that! it looks awesome and inspiring! now im making my own comics
BTW i thumbs upped and i may subscribe if you make more :)
lostsouloffps 1 year ago 3
Good comic, good story. How do you draw in the tiny panels like that? I'm so bad at that Dx
Also, I love Mark Crilley with a burning passion.
:D
Kimiko11111 1 year ago
woow
xXnikmanXx 1 year ago
Very bad...
experthot2 1 year ago
nice comic you should check out mine too. I hoped you continued the story lol. I think you should make his dairy seem I don't know less, 'I like guns I don't know why' I'm not trying to be rude I have no intention of being rude but, his dairy entry seems kind of strange in a way. Anyway, subbed I hope you don't take this comment the wrong idea. Nice concept though.
sianthaibright 1 year ago
@sianthaibright I agree with what your saying but I stopped making this and drawing period. A long time ago because It got boring. But I draw still only when people ask me to make something for them
JShamw0w 1 year ago
good jobXD
Sharkhearts101 1 year ago
i like your style of drawing and storyline. YOU ROCK =)
thebigjpd 1 year ago
are you implying jfk was corrupt?
velstor 1 year ago
@velstor When Did I mention JFK? I might have but sorry this video is old so I don't really remember it. But I definately do not think that. Jfk was an awesome prez
JShamw0w 1 year ago
dude tell me when ur done with it.ill pay 4 it.=-p
xxxmachinegun 1 year ago
nice! like the backgrounds and the gun on the front page a lot
the ppl r good 2 xD
liapryce 1 year ago
now i wanna make a vid of my manga. nice job dude long live manga
Mangaboy1016 1 year ago
not bad bro
MrSketchtastic 2 years ago
Dude!! Your 12!? Your good. I like you, your imaginitive, artistic, and bold. I'm kepping my eye on the anime market for a new book: elite sight
Indiemannews 2 years ago
awesome! unique drawing style... something fresh to look at. I started drawing a manga a few days ago... its more complicated than i thought XD
justwatchin655 2 years ago
I don't like the shapes of the body or the faces. But your inking is really good.
HizuPlague 2 years ago
Lol It actually isn't inking. Its just doodles.I never pencil or anything just improvise. I wanted to focus on more of the story. In my school people like to read fun stories as long as the drawings are half decent.
JShamw0w 2 years ago
Thats awesome its nice to see people express themselves by making mangas doodles and etc. nice job 5 stars :)
HakuroTheKaiDog 2 years ago
awesome i draw manga too
secondworldFB 2 years ago
cool jefery ill call u when i see u this is shaid bmb honeybuttercup lolz ley me get ur aim.
masterbatman818 2 years ago
Lol xD nnnn----SHHAAAAAAAIIIID!
JShamw0w 2 years ago
i really like this so far, hopefully you'll be able to post more up every once and a while :)
cinnamon586 2 years ago
Cool thanks. I actually have gotten far with this but I need a memory card in order to scan the pics to read.
JShamw0w 2 years ago
cool...awesome! hopefully you'll get a card!!!
cinnamon586 2 years ago
My name isn't John Pefferd By the way.
Its Jeffrey Almonte thats why it says "Story Created By Jeffrey Almonte"
JShamw0w 2 years ago
i like you book so far ^.^ please do more
ventusbakuganuser 2 years ago 6
your good a drawing
PaperGTutorials 2 years ago 7