Okay, but you could have carried out the story out a lot better. Here's some friendly criticism from a film student... first of all I didn't feel attached to sofia, her father needed to be moving a lot more to emphasize his anger and impatience. You should have probably started off with sofia just coming from the abortion clinic and hiding the abortion documents. You should have had the father read some of the letter out loud and while he read he should have had a major emotion shift.
Okay, but you could have carried out the story out a lot better. Here's some friendly criticism from a film student... first of all I didn't feel attached to sofia, her father needed to be moving a lot more to emphasize his anger and impatience. You should have probably started off with sofia just coming from the abortion clinic and hiding the abortion documents. You should have had the father read some of the letter out loud and while he read he should have had a major emotion shift.
avelarproductions 1 year ago