Stand up comedy practice No. 1

[gnrfanish]

you are making good points, but where are these punchlines.

[t0nyram]

i dont mean to offend you im just being honest as requested your routine felt like more of a rant than stand up i became bored about half way through i think you have potential tho i respect the courage it takes to make a video and have random people online rate your performance the only advise i can give is try to arive at the punchline a little sooner ... keep following your dream

[99emobunnies]

i LOVE your accent! you're really smart, too. very fubbt! good luck!

[val1ent]

"It's also historically accurate."

I don't know anything about British history, but when you said that, I laughed.

[Corndizzog14]

laughs would be really spaced apart. maybe pause after ur punchline or shorten story to just key funny parts

[simonmarshall1]

first comment didnt work so ill try again..made me smile in parts (saddam bit) but i thought u could maybe try to get some more funny lines in there espcially at the beginning..material was good but there was not enough laugh out loud bits compared to the length of the vid..keep refining it, keep trying and im sure your ll get there..good luck

[canobeans]

I thought it was really good.

Usually with any YouTube video after 5 minutes I just start to wander away to something else, but I watched the whole video. It had a nice flow to it and I thought the material was original and funny.

Good stuff.

[jomayc0ck]

I've just watched it back and I'm normally more energetic than this but it's really late. Mainly it's about the material.

Cheers x