Star Trek: The Enemy Within Act 1 Script Reedit

[hossola77]

Thank you very much for your wonderful editing and this upload. The story flows so much better here with more emotional impact.

"The Enemy Within", in my opinion, is one of 'Star Trek: The Original Series' most underrated episodes.

Awesome job, sir!

[MrSchultzstaffel]

They never should have had Kirk's behavior explained as a transporter malfunction. He should have been this way on his own the whole time! What an excellent example of a working enviroment that people have to put up with because Kirk has friends in high-places and by pulling some political strings he get's to keep his job after a sexual assault. Our "flawed Captain" turns out to be a 23rd century panty-sniffing sadist. Would have made for a reality-TV first...and a realistic one at that! lol =D

[mandrake2273]

What is really interesting about this episode, is that Spock's gestures are different in this episode, then the rest and he has a lot of expressions, not seen in the rest of the Star Trek episodes!

[1bichon1]

Is there a way odfactually doing this? That would be a great episode? Maybe Rand could have walked in to his cabin with the evil Kirk?

[1bichon1]

Dear goback3spaces,

I agree 100%. You should have been writing the scripts for original Star Trek.

[goback3spaces]

Oh well. Born too late. At least we can imagine it!

[anariel2000]

this works a lot better actually.

[Jusala12]

Does anyone have the full episode?

[ihearttheplanet]

why are you watching it then

[goback3spaces]

I suppose it's too hard to create an edit wherein Janice quickly and happily succumbs to Kirk's advances. This would make for a story with richer and more complex emotional overtones. Janice, who has always wanted Kirk, now finds herself working at odds with Kirk and Spock in an effort to keep the evil Kirk as he is, even to the destruction of the good Kirk. In her desperate effort to stay with the evil Kirk, Janice might knowingly go through the transporter herself, creating an evil Janice.

[cottonwhiskersuk]

Yes, I remember her saying to Kirk in another episode "I always wanted you to look at my legs".

[grumpytosnowwhite]

It really is better this way, although I'm sure that in the script Kirk and Spock were urgently called into the transporter room by Scotty, otherwise it would be stupid for them to go "Oh, we have an imposter aboard. Right, lets wander around and see what Scotty's been up to." However, I actually think that not only does it flow well, but Kirk's "realization" of how his imposter appeared made it *more* dramatic than the original cut. Good work.

[fgeorge76]

I always thought the "imposter" line was Spock's way to cover up for Kirk. Because Kirk was the Captain, and they couldn't have them "loose faith in Kirk."

However, it does make better sense this way though.

[creepymeepy]

Captain? Why are you wearing eyeliner?

[anariel2000]

You can tell evilKirk from goodKirk easily : wears eyeliner and is underlit by a flashlight

[idreamedmusic]

Thank you for making this. It does run much smoother narrative-wise.

And yummy, never too much shirtless Kirk.

[317596]

i always thought that spock's saying "we have an intruder aboard" was his stating what should be made public to the crew, but this makes much more sense. if you get hold of the season one DVDs with the remastered special fx, I suggest you add in an image on the viewscreen at the end, flip the negative back in the opening and please explain why the shuttlecraft isn't used. furthermore, you should do this again with all the episodes of this otherwise great series.

[randyguyngal4]

Outstanding. Thank you for creating/reediting this for us all. One clearly sees Richard Matheson's original intent, and the mystery solved in the correct order, and as noted in the previous comments, it makes far more sense than before. Brilliant, and thanks for visiting the ORION PRESS website.

[yutu34]

I wonder whether it should have been this way originally and someone in 1966 stuffed up the editoring

[albion432]

It was scripted the way I have edited it here(see About This Video for more details) and it was during editing that the director felt they needed a more dramatic climax leading to the commercial break, which he felt having Spock announcing there's an impostor onboard delivered, so they switched the scenes.

[yutu34]

thanks, this has always annoyed me and now you have made it all make sense...cheers

[neonknights]

That website says that it was actually director Leo Penn who "stuffed up the editoring". We should tell Sean Penn how bad his daddy had been... :-D

[PokerJoker3]

Original cut, they already showed the 2 dogs, then Spock later says "we have an imposter aboard" I used to think, "are they really that dumb!" Like DUH, its a Kirk double, nice re-edit.

[PokerJoker3]

well another flaw is, why didnt they just send down a shuttlecraft to recue freezing Suku and crew?

[317596]

my theory is that the shuttlecrafts just weren't installed yet, but i wish they'd explained that in the 2008 remastered version. sheck out the blooper in this clip: when kirk punches fisher, you can see him roll out from under him and try to jump out of the shot behind bill shatner!

[Llaaseil]

I guess it has been too long since I have seen the original, or my memory is slipping. What are the changes? Would someone please specify?

[albion432]

When watching this edit the fade between Spock leaving Kirks quarters and Rand entering hers was where the edit was made. Originally you have Kirk and Spock going to the transporter room in the interim. In my edit this scene is placed at the end of the act as scripted. So when Spock announces that there's an impostor on board it is before they learn that the transporter is creating doubles.

[Llaaseil]

Thank you. That was informational. Keep up the good work.

[annafrancesca1]

Yes, it is better this way!

[flareshadow]

Very good with this...it does make the episode better this way. It's not one of my favorite episodes, but it is an improvement.

[Yesimustbestupid]

I agree about how it makes the episode much better. Although, this was one of my favorite TOS' episodes (at least from the first season). I was wondering, albion, whether you could post the entire episode both w/ & w/out the script changes to make comparison to the flow of continuity w/ & w/out the changes? That might be telling.